Review of “Crashing Into You’ By B.D. Rowe

This is a book about a your girl, Sydney and how she is try to overcome the tragedies in her life to have normal college experiences.  Sydney is in love with her Dorm roommate’s boyfriend, Evan and he shows some significant interest in her as well.  Evan and Sydney are connected because of a class and spend time together without his girlfriend – her roommate- because of this class. Sydney fantasized about Evan and want’s to be with him but refuses to hurt her friend.  Sydney has had tragedy at a young age and it has changed her profoundly.  She is not the carefree, easygoing, partying typical college student.

The theme of the books is tragedy surrounded by the effects of drinking.  The message isn’t don’t drink but it certainly is be responsible when you do.

What I liked – not much I must admit.  Sydney, I liked her.  She seemed to be so tragic though that pulled away from the story.  She was strong and stuck to her commitment about drinking have survived a terrible event in her senior year.  I can’t imagine the anguish one would feel after living through what she did.  It doesn’t surprise me that she would be so committed in her plight.

What I did not like.

Well – TOO MANY TRAGIC THINGS GOING ON IN THIS BOOK!  There is what happens to Sydney in high school, then Melanie then that ending – jeeze.

The writing seemed clunky and rushed.  The scenes could have been more defined and elaborated upon rather than rushed and passed over for the next sad and horrifying event.  As with my fellow reviewers, I feel for this author as it is her first book and there are pockets of good.  I loved the way that Evan and Sydney finally do hook up but again the scene seemed rushed and not really connected to anything else.

Somethings weren’t explained entirely.  Like the ending for one…I HATED the ending of this book and felt so cheated.  I’m assuming that the author plans to write a second book for this one because the ending was sooooooo undone.  The writer just didn’t hit the mark with this book so I don’t know that she would get many return readers unfortunately to read the next one if the writing is as clunky as this one.

Overall, I would only afford this book a half a star to 1 star.  It just didn’t do it for me.

Now the cover on the other hand….FABULOUS!  The book just didn’t even live up to the cover!

B.D. Rowe, if you happen to come across this, here are my recommendations to making this book a smashing 5 star…

1.  Embellish on the beginning… Start with a Prologue that says something like Sydney – 18 years old – high school.  or 5 years earlier…something!  Then be descriptive.  Talk through the accident as if in slow motion and embellish on her memories of that night.  Zero in on the little boys face or the moment of impact and the thoughts that were racing through her head.  MAKE THE READER FEEL IT!

2. Definitely embellish the little triangle between Melanie, Evan and Sydney.  Have a cat fight in there between Melanie and Sydney.  Have a few flashbacks or NIGHTMARES that Evan has about that fateful night or even Sydney and the cat fight that you add.  Sydney should have several nightmares when sleeping with Evan…over what happened when she was 18 and what happened with Melanie.  Her guilt should consume her somewhat more than it does.

3.  Detail, Detail, Detail.  Describe things.  the Crunch of the impact….Evan’s soft pink lips, or beard stubble and the beard burn on her thighs or ribs or chin…whatever.  JUST ADD DETAILS!

4.  RE-WRITE that ending.  What a mess.  Add detail. change the way the events begin to unfold and ultimately land.  Make the triangle between Sydney, Evan and Michelle (the sister) a bit more dramatic…Do another party where Evan and Michelle start out at this party and go to a bedroom rather than her dorm.  ADD DRAMA.  Don’t be so doom and gloom.  People read books to get SOME happiness from it.  Give this girl a little piece of happiness.

5. FINISH the ending in this book.  Give the reader some closure.  I’m all for cliff hangers but come on.  NOTHING is explained and there is way too much undone and not concluded.  And you wait for the very last page to have Evan reveal the reality of that night…BAD form!

I could go on and up but I think even if you re-write and add these 5 things…you would have a far better book.

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